One Sentence Challenge #2: A Long Car Ride

Again, I’d like to thank E. Darby Harrington at Orienting Details for inspiring this idea. Please check out her site and show her content some love.

The point of a one sentence challenge is write the most perfectly written sentence that you are able. It is a challenge in brevity, clarity, and artistry. I also wanted you all, my wonderful audience, to participate which is why every One Sentence Challenge post will have a prompt. As you can see from the title, the prompt for this week is A Long Car Ride.

I finished this one in about the same time as the first one, in about 12 minutes.

1st Attempt: Back ache and heart break, but despite that I’m heading to you.

2nd Attempt: Backache and sad pangs, but despite that I’ll drive to you.

3rd Attempt: Feeling backache and sad pangs, I drive to you.

4th Attempt: Feeling like the geriatric old man that matches my soul, the back pain and the constant looking back, despite this I drive to you

5th Attempt: A geriatric would deal better with this distance, and with less back pain, nonetheless, I drive to you

6th Attempt: Haunted by a geriatric spirit, manifesting in back pain and an unhealthy relationship with the past, I drive to you

7th Attempt: Haunted by a geriatric spirit, which manifests back pain, I drive to you

8th Attempt: Haunted by a geriatric spirit manifesting back pain and rumination, I drive to you

Final Attempt (Took me a ton of times this time!): Despite being haunted by a geriatric spirit manifesting back pain and rumination, I drove to you. 

I hope you enjoyed my one sentence and the journey to become what I thought was the best version of itself. Please leave a comment below with the best sentence you can make with the prompt A Long Car Ride.

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